Archie 8.5.21

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 Suddenly, darkness enveloped the room and it became really scary. ‘Where are the lights?’ it was pitch black inside of a haunted house. The day was october the 31 and we all knew what that meant. I was shivering, my teeth were chattering, I heard a noise ‘ bang bang bang’ It was coming from the basement, the door creaked open. I slowly walked backwards and walked into something. I screamed ‘aaaaaaa’ lucky it was Tom. He was here to save me I felt, but he shoved me so hard down the basement stairs ‘bang’ the door shut. I was trapped……

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  1. Francine (Team 100)May 9, 2021 at 2:31 AM

    Hello Archie!

    Your story was spooky and suspenseful! I enjoyed how you included sounds, talking, and very descriptive words like “pitch black,” “chattering,” and “creaked open.” Well done-I am nominating your entry for this week’s showcase!

    Keep writing!
    Francine (Team 100)
    Twin Cities, Minnesota (USA)

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  2. AnonymousMay 9, 2021 at 3:17 PM

    nice work Archie

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  3. AnonymousJune 7, 2021 at 4:19 PM

    Good job archie

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  4. AnonymousJune 7, 2021 at 4:33 PM

    Nice work Archie!

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