Archie - statue

 I remember the day war started he was the leader of the english army we all loved him so much he was our hero. He had 200 IQ. He knew every plan the Germans were going to take and he would always counter attack them. He took us to victory. I also remember the day he passed away from the germans terrorist attack even though the war had ended a year before. I met him once at a dinner. He played the drums for all of us. There was nothing that man couldn’t do. He will always be a legend.

Comments

  1. Hello Archie,

    The soldier in your story would have been very brave to have achieved so much. How sad he didn't survive but at least his legend lives on.
    One tip, your first sentence might have been split into more than one sentence to heighten the tension in your story. Keep writing!

    Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
    Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia

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