Ethan 8.5.21

 It was like a normal day I thought to myself. Everything was quiet. You couldn't hear a single peep. Everything was strange, maybe a bit too strange. I headed to my house “MUM DAD WHERE ARE YOU!” I started to cry. Unexpectedly everything stopped. “Mum is that you?'' I cry out. Suddenly, darkness enveloped the room “Who’s there” . My instincts told me it's no good, but then I felt nauseous. I think I might pass out “thud” “Son Son!” What happened mum “you passed out” we found you  so we took you to the hospital now you are safe now.

Comments

  1. What a turn of events!! I've never fainted before, and I surely hope its not as terrifying as your story portrays it. You have taken this weeks prompt and turned it into a mini psychological thriller, well done. This is very well written. Did you know that you can use asterisk's to make a sound when writing? For example, try saying *Thud* instead of "Thud" to make your work even more impressive. Keep up the good work.

    Seren (Team 100)

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  2. Good job Ethan just look out where you need punctuation.
    From Archie.

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  3. Great work Ethan!

    Just make sure your punctuation is correct.

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